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lilmizchatterbox3

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maramail

11th Jan 2009 00:27

17 years, 5 months & 22 days ago

my story - The house of stuart black...

7th Jan 2009 21:19

17 years, 5 months & 25 days ago

lilmizchatterbox3 12 Comments

my story - The house of stuart black...

17 years, 5 months & 25 days ago

7th Jan 2009 21:19

this is the first part of a story im making up.. its about wen 2 of my friends and i get locked in a haunted house by the school bully. plz tell if you like it!

It was a dark thundery night, everything was quiet and the only thing that moved were the dark trees blowing in the wind. But there was always someone watching you, sitting in the window below the drapes, inside the house of Stuart black???

???Angela stop daydreaming and get out of bed!!!!!??? my mum called. ???Noooooo I???m sleeping??? I yawned drowsily. ???Don???t make me come down there??? my mum warned, ???ok ok I???m coming??? I moaned rubbing my eyes. It was the first day of school for 2009 and I was in year 6 and as much as I didn???t want to go to school I couldn???t wait to see all my friends.

As I walked down the hallway I looked at the clock, 8.30! I rushed to my bag, got my lunch, packed my books and ran out door saying ???see-you mum, bye dad, got to run!???

I only just got to school on time??? the moment I stepped into my class room I heard a ???RING!!!!??? (The siren). I walked into the classroom feeling a little bit embarrassed since everyone was staring at me. It didn???t bother the teacher though because she was checking the roll. Then I forced myself to walk through the middle of the class room and sit down next to my friends Alex and Allana.

Alex (Allie) has reddish-brown hair, is fairly tall, is 11years old and has quite a temper when she wanted to use it. On the other hand Allana (Lana) has light brown hair, is reasonably tall for her age, is 10 years old and absolutely adores horses. ???Hi what have you been up to on the holidays???? I whispered to both of them. ???Nothing much??? they both replied ???yeah same here??? I said getting bored. By this time the teacher had finished marking the roll. My teacher, Mrs Tinderson had very dark brown hair, was about 40 and could get very strict if we didn???t pay attention in class.

At recess I grabbed my packet of cookies from my bad and went over to my friends, they always take longer than me to get there recess out of there bags. Anyway I was trying to keep clear of the bright pink bag in the middle of all the bags ??? you want to know why, Polly Patterson.

She had shiny black hair, was the tallest person in my age group, is the most popular person in the school, ALWAYS gets her own way, her parents are billionaires and she teases people that she doesn???t like (including me). But there was one thing that was clear, she hated my attitude.

So I was just sitting down chatting to Alex and Allana when Polly started walking in my direction ???here comes Miss Polly pegleg??? I said rolling my eyes. ???Yeah, miss the fashion failure??? Allana replied ???yep that???s pestering Polly alright??? Alex agreed.

Polly approached us with her usual group of friends behind her. ???Oh look what the cat dragged in??? Polly said casually and her friends laughed. ???Look can you just leave us alone for 10 seconds, I mean were trying to eat!??? said Lana beginning to get angry. Polly looked at her expensive watch and said ???it???s been 10 seconds???. ???Then wait an hour miss mathematician!??? Allie shouted through all the noise. I stood up I had had enough of Polly pegleg bossing my friends and I around. ???What is your problem!??? I shouted.???Ok twerps, meet me at 7.30, 193 ruckle road, tonight??? said Polly and walked off with a suspicious grin on her face.

That night I had to convince my mum that I was having a sleepover at Alex???s house and Allana was coming too, at first mum didn???t believe me and kept on questioning me but with a little persuasion I finally got to the point were they had to believe me. Allana and Alex also had to do the same but pretend that they were going to each others houses.

It was 7.20 pm and I was making my way to 193 ruckle road I saw that it was getting a little bit darker each minuet. When I got to ruckle road I was amazed, all the houses were huge! They were mansions! I walked down the street and looked at the numbers ??? 101,102,103 ???oh this is going to take forever??? I thought. A couple of minuets later I saw Alex and Allana waiting for me at the end of the road. I ran up to them and said ???hi??? but they weren???t interested. They were just gazing up at some big, black, dusty old gates leading to an old mansion.I looked at the number.???193??? I mumbled disappointedly.

???Wow??? I said quietly trying to get my friends attention. ???It???s as big as 12 elephants!??? Alex said gasping, and she wasn???t wrong. ???Where???s Polly???? Allana asked remembering who asked us to come here. ???I don???t know??? Allie and I said in unison. ???Well she better not have chickened out!??? I protested. ???How about we have a look inside??? said Allana. ???Are you sure???? asked Alex, ???I don???t like the look of this place???. ???Oh we???ll be fine!??? I laughed so we walked up to the gates. ???These gates look like they haven???t been dusted in years! I made clear to both my friends. ???This like a scene of an old horror movie or something??? said Allana who looks had a good imagination. ???Common lets show Polly that we can handle her bossing us around!??? I said confidently as I opened the creaky gate.

???This place gets creepier by the second!??? said Allie with not much confidence. The three of us slowly made it to the rusty, dusty wooden door with cobwebs on the edges. ???Well this is it??? said Allana with a shaky voice. ???Remember whatever happens we have to stay together??? I reminded my two friends. We all put one had on the door handle and pulled. Slowly the door creaked open, we started into the darkness until we felt a push on our backs. We all fell into the house on top of each other in one big ???CLUMP!??? Shocked and scared we looked behind us to see a dark figure standing at the door step. ???Have fun!??? the voice said and we all seemed to recognise it. ???POLLY!??? we all shouted as she slammed the door and laughed.

thats all im gonna show you for now!! hope you like it!!

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farmtrader123

that was meant to be surrounded by

17 years, 5 months & 25 days ago

7th Jan 2009 22:54

farmtrader123

Try 2 have a starting like...

this is from one of my books i wrote when i was 12.

In the depths of the forest lay a small cottage. surrounded be the dense trees no one knew it existed.
no one that is accept Alakae.

try some thing like that.
p.s. if it sounds mean what i said i didn't try to say anything mean.

17 years, 5 months & 25 days ago

7th Jan 2009 22:53