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JakeAnnalea
I once had a friend.He moved away.

I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten.

We had some memories.

I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me.
We got through it together.

We had some memories.

I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around.

We had some memories.

I remember when you didnt come to school that day.

I had some memories.

I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed.
You were bruised and hurting.

We had some memories.

I remember your funeral.I was crying.
Then I took a look at your short life with me.

I smiled and thought,we had some memories.

You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
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JakeAnnalea2 Feb 201022comments
Comments (22)
  • mileycyrus0900 0 mileycyrus0900Did his dad murder him? Did his dad beat him to death? You did have some memories! R.I.P kid in poem!
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayeah his dad beat him to death.i miss him every day,but i remember all the fun we had together.
  • Lillylovesyou2 0 Lillylovesyou2That's sad. You should put it into stanzas tho. Like this: I once had a friend. He moved away. I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten. We had some memories. I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me. We got through it together. We had some memories. I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around. We had some memories. I remember when you didn't come to school that day. I had some memories. I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed. You were bruised and hurting. We had some memories. I remember your funeral. I was crying. Then I took a look at your short life with me. I smiled and thought,we had some memories. You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai miss him!
  • ShootingSky9 0 ShootingSky9???The poem had no emotion to me. ???To much repeating of "we had some memories" ???Follow lilly's advice and make stanzas
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai tryed doing that.i like the poem the way it is.
  • cutiepatootie2 0 cutiepatootie2???The poem had no emotion to me. ???To much repeating of "we had some memories" ???Follow lilly's advice and make stanzas -=- True the poem had emotion, but you can feel it through thew words in a way. The repeat of "We had some memories" is what made it a poem. And yes, you should make it into stanza's, which shouldn't be a problem.
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai will try.
  • cutiepatootie2 0 cutiepatootie2I know you tried to put it in stanza's, but its more like this: (SOMEWHAT like this) I once had a friend. He moved away. I remember swinging on the tire swing with him in kindergarten. We had some memories. I remember the day his daddy beat him,he told me. We got through it together. We had some memories. I remember the day we swam in the creek,splashing around. We had some memories. I remember when you didn't come to school that day. I had some memories. I remember the day turned into a week,and you finally showed. You were bruised and hurting. We had some memories. I remember your funeral. I was crying. Then I took a look at your short life with me. I smiled and thought,we had some memories. You moved to Heaven and someday I will be there with you.
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleathis kid in the poem resembles all poor kids that get abused.
  • majette 0 majetteSad. Oh, and although some people may not call it a poem, sometimes it just helps to get your thoughts down. I know that; I did it recently when my uncle died from cancer. http://www.marapets.com/topics.php?id=2318929&fid=30
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleawell majette,i know exactly how it feels.cancer claimed my Grandma Vina and my Aunt Jill in one year.Aunt Jill had a baby and a 4 year old.
  • majette 0 majetteOh, that's so sad!!! What cancer did they have? My uncle had non-hodgkins lymphoma. (Or however you spell it.)
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleai really dont know what kind they had.but it was horrible.
  • majette 0 majetteHmmm...yeah, I can see how sad you must be.
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayeah it was really sad.
  • LiCoRiCeThEpRiNcEsS 0 LiCoRiCeThEpRiNcEsStrue story!?!?!?! i'm so sorry!! <333
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleayes it is true.
  • sweetieful 0 sweetiefulthe repeating of "we had memories" shows the emotion, plants it in the mind, it makes the peom flow, i should no its like wot i do wiith my friends 4 my a levels
  • JakeAnnalea 0 JakeAnnaleathank you and i think that h is better off in Heaven.
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