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Nichelle
We dance all night long
When the music stops you say "Play another song"
Then everyone leaves and the laughter is gone
You and I sit here its totally calm
As we sit you grab my palm
You look into my eyes as they glisten
And I sit there quietly as I listen
I love you you tell me
And its then and there,
I know
You and I are meant to
Be


We gaze at the night sky
We tell each other not one lie
Its me and you
You and I
For then you grab my hand and say
"I can not be with you, I can not stay"
The cracks my heart, straight in two,
But then I realize I can't be with you
I sigh and pull away from your grasp
I slip away from you at last



The time we share will always be treasured
My darling dear for now and forever
You will be loved I can honestly say
Day after day after day after day
You are my love
You are my joy
Even though you are a pixel
Even though your but a toy
You will be treasured with out a doubt
Though if I don't get you I will not pout


Ok, Will be adding more soonhappy.gif Thanks for reading! Please rate!!
Nichelle43
Nichelle15 Aug 200825comments
Comments (25)
  • 0 ANKGproductions1000000000000000000/10
  • Nichelle 43 Nichelle^.^ Thanks
  • michaelhall 0 michaelhallum 1st poem aint has 3 lines in a row rhyming dont really like that. i think you should take out the you and i sit here its totally calm. you also need some commas.
  • lidia101101 0 lidia101101It's Really nice, but i think this would work better: As we sit you grab my palm You look 'into' my eyes as they glisten
  • Nichelle 43 NichelleThanks lidia! I'll change that
  • 0 magicalbritt9/10 It was good.
  • puppy951 0 puppy95110/10 i loved it!,i also write poetry and this is just awsome
  • Struggles 0 StrugglesWow, I didn't know it was about a pixel! That's really pretty ❤️ 10/10
  • Nichelle 43 NichelleStruggles-Well, I don't know 😆 I was just writing actually
  • firestarlover123 0 firestarlover123they are good. so i give it a nine and a half out of ten.
  • joja45 75 joja45you also need some commas. ---- Poems are meant for breaking the rules. It is fine the way it is. 9.75/10 😆
  • Sparcle5 0 Sparcle5ooh, how pretty. I love that second one most, it has a good point to it.
  • Sparcle5 0 Sparcle59/10 <333 9 because you pay very much attention to rhyming. Not every poem is made to rhyme. Some poems are beautiful as they are because of the sillible matching in the stanzas, and some poems are just better off not rhyming but then they'll sound better. You shouldn't care much for rhyming. Just as long as the poem is coming from your soul, it will always be a poem, and a beautiful one at that
  • Flower124 0 Flower12410/10 good job
  • luv2shop16 0 luv2shop1610/10 great job!!!!!!
  • Sharky101 0 Sharky1019.99999999/10 That was a great poem! Other then the punctuational errors that (VERY) rarely occured it was GREAT!! XDDDD
  • Sensei 1 SenseiWow 10/10 Maffeh! ❤️
  • Marajade 64 MarajadeWow 10/10 Maffeh! ❤️
  • Marajade 64 Marajade10/10 great job!!!!!!
  • stephaniethepuppy 0 stephaniethepuppy10/10 i love them especially number 2
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