he lies with a teardrop on his cheek dripping down to fall on sodden sheets, the hopelessness in his brain overcomes him as he lays alone and silently weeps, voices and the pain screaming the intensity of loss burning hurt ripping through him as the wind blows outside the window moving the world forward a world that he wants to see a world that he wants to share a world he knows he will no longer see and the pain grips intensifying with every breath. and then stills. as the hurt leaks weaker from his heart he turns his head to the window and stares at the moon, swallowed up in its greatness the extreme existence of earth his mind follows his life and wonders? pondering the complexity that is living acceptance overwhelms him as he lays down his tired head and gently closes his defeated eyes against a world that never real knew what it was that he said.
******** copyright of this poem has been registered to myself so please do not copy and paste onto random blogs - many thanks - johnny
114 years, 8 months & 12 days ago 23rd Oct 2011 08:38
Lovely, I hate hearing sad stuff though =/
115 years, 3 months & 9 days ago 26th Mar 2011 23:11
I love it! I think it has a great flow to it Your a very good writer!
115 years, 6 months & 23 days ago 10th Dec 2010 16:00
ehh, theres no flow its good but something forced is.....'boring' as would would sy
116 years, 5 months & 17 days ago 16th Jan 2010 03:59
It reflects in my situation right now.
116 years, 5 months & 17 days ago 16th Jan 2010 03:07
Touching- but really, not worthy of the reviews written below. Its very descriptive, but if I were to give you a rating out of ten, it would only amount to an eight.
116 years, 5 months & 18 days ago 15th Jan 2010 20:44
good
116 years, 5 months & 18 days ago 15th Jan 2010 18:12
116 years, 5 months & 18 days ago 15th Jan 2010 18:11
very good
and correct roxy, I belive a poem that rhymes is too..forced, its not real.
117 years & 14 days ago 21st Jun 2009 17:52
wow, i also love writing poetry this is very good andahti what you said before poems DO NOT always have to rhyme theres different themes and writing of poetry =)
17 years, 2 months & 1 day ago
Your a very good writer!
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